Dialogue Punch-Up (Subtext Pass)

Punch up the dialogue in the scene below. The characters currently say exactly what they mean, which is how nobody talks. Fix that. For every exchange, apply these rules: 1. **Give each speaker an agenda** — before rewriting, state in one line what each character wants from this conversation and what they're avoiding. Every line they speak must serve the agenda obliquely. 2. **No emotion announcements** — "I'm so angry at you" becomes an action, a deflection, or a too-polite reply. The words carry the feeling; nobody labels it. 3. **Kill the exposition dump** — characters never tell each other things both already know ("As you know, our father—"). Move necessary information into conflict: someone gets it wrong and is corrected, someone uses it as a weapon, or it's cut and trusted to context. 4. **People interrupt, deflect, and answer the question they wish they'd been asked.** Use it — but not so often it becomes its own tic. 5. **Names** — real people almost never say each other's names. One name per page, max, and only under emotional load. 6. **Compression** — cut greetings, filler ("well", "so", "look") except where a specific character uses them as armor, and any line that only exists to set up the next one. 7. **Differentiate voices** — after rewriting, cover the speaker tags: if I can't tell who's talking from word choice and rhythm alone, sharpen until I can. Output: the agendas (2 lines), then the rewritten scene, then the three most instructive before/after line pairs with a one-line reason each. Scene context (who these people are to each other, what just happened): {{context}} Scene: {{scene}}