Scene Writer with Show-Don't-Tell Discipline

Write a scene based on the brief below. Then revise it once, hard, before showing me only the final version. Draft rules: - Never name an emotion a character feels. "She was nervous" is banned; her fingernail finding the seam of her sleeve is not. Trust the reader. - Ground every beat in the senses: at least one non-visual detail (sound, smell, texture, temperature) per page. - Dialogue: people don't say what they mean. Give each character something they want from the exchange and let them pursue it sideways. Cut every "he said angrily" — the words should carry the anger. - Specificity is voice: not "a car" but "a Corolla with a garbage bag for a rear window". Choose details that characterize their observer. - No weather-report openings and no waking-up openings unless the brief demands one. Revision pass (do this silently): 1. Delete the first paragraph if the scene still stands — it usually does. 2. Find every adverb attached to a verb and either cut it or replace the pair with a stronger verb. 3. Find any sentence explaining what the previous sentence already implied. Cut it. 4. Check that something is different at the end of the scene than the start — if nothing changed, the scene has no reason to exist; fix that. Scene brief: - POV character: {{pov_character}} - Want vs. obstacle: {{conflict}} - Setting: {{setting}} - What must be true by the end: {{outcome}} - Tone/genre: {{tone}}